I want to thank all of you for taking the time to read my Fan Faction "Sesshomaru's Empire" I hope you have enjoyed reading it as much as I have enjoyed writing it. I also thank you for the feedback I
have received regarding the story and website. I have read each and everyone of them and I would like to take a moment to address or respond to a couple of comments I saw.
NOTE: I would like to point out first and foremost that this new Inuyasha series that Sunrise is producing, I have nothing to do with that and I did not take any ideas from the new series. If anything, the new series has taken some of my ideas from this story because I created this website and fanfic story in October of 2015....please see the " About" section at the very bottom where it says copywrited by me in 2015. I came up with Sesshomaru having twin daughters, I came up with the idea of him gaining his empire (which manifested from me watching the original series). Therefore my story is not going to match the new series or be anything like it. This story and website was a creation of mine over 5 years ago.
6. INTERESTING CRITIQUE : Below is a critique I got from someone who read this story, I would like to respond to this persons comment/ critique of my story. I do read the surveys and this was one I read
readers comment - Only thing I didn't like about this fanfiction is that the names of the evil demons or enemies are NOT Japanese or Japanese sounding. Would have done some research or asked a Japanese friend with help with naming the foes. Plus, Rin with a slingshot? LOL Give that girl a real weapon like Kohaku's or Sango's if she is going to be a certified demon slayer. Also, have Rin know martial arts or have some kind of spiritual powers like Kagome. Slingshot does not do a whole lot of damage at all. Plus, Rin needs way better character delevopment. She is not a beam of sunshine and rainbows. She should be badass like Sesshomaru and the rest of the Inuyasha gang.
My response - Thank you for this feedback however, I need to clear somethings up. Rin does have a real weapon, her weapon is as good as Kohaku's and Sango's...if you look at the picture of Chapter 4 "Rin the Demon Slayer" there is a picture of it on her back. Also in chapter 1 the very first weapon she was given is the weapon she carries, (given to her by Kohaku as a gift) called a Naginta. If you look this up on the internet there are plenty of pictures of what a Naginta looks like. Also, the sling shot is her second weapon that she uses and they were very effective back in the olden days....David Killed the Giant Goliath with one. You say Rin should be as Bad Ass as Sesshomaru and Inuyasha's gang, well she is as bad as she's going to get because she is not a demon....she is a human, she has no special powers but has been trained by Lady Sango and Kohaku on how to fight, how to slay demons and how to use her weapons; she also has survival skills from being an orphan and a strong passion to protect others nothing more. Lastly, why the evil demons don't have Japanese names? Some of them do...but truthfully, I am an American girl who wrote this fan fiction and I had no desire to have long, complicated names to pronounce and spell in my version of a sequel story. When I got it into my head to create this fan fiction, I already had names picked out and decided to keep them simple. Ryo, Suzaku and a few others do have Japanese names but Zeref's name was completely made from my imagination and I wanted it that way so that it would be unique. I also wanted Nephra, Zephra and Heroshya the children of Sesshomaru to have names that could not be found on the internet or mistaken for some other story. They were unique names I invented special for this story. Hope that clarifies some things. Thank you for your comment and feedback.
have received regarding the story and website. I have read each and everyone of them and I would like to take a moment to address or respond to a couple of comments I saw.
NOTE: I would like to point out first and foremost that this new Inuyasha series that Sunrise is producing, I have nothing to do with that and I did not take any ideas from the new series. If anything, the new series has taken some of my ideas from this story because I created this website and fanfic story in October of 2015....please see the " About" section at the very bottom where it says copywrited by me in 2015. I came up with Sesshomaru having twin daughters, I came up with the idea of him gaining his empire (which manifested from me watching the original series). Therefore my story is not going to match the new series or be anything like it. This story and website was a creation of mine over 5 years ago.
- MORE PICTURES: I noticed that readers are requesting more pictures, many people have said that they wish there had been more pictures. Since people are asking for more I will be looking into adding more pictures to the website. I know that pictures and scenes help bring the characters to life and I am currently drawing more pictures but my art is not the greatest therefore I have reached out to the original artist to see if she would be willing to draw some more pictures to add to the website so hopefully there will be more pictures soon. Keep in mind it takes time and money to produce great art so we will create more pictures of Rin and Sesshomaru together (since there are very little of them together) and more of the other characters as soon as possible.
- PICTURES SHOWING UP AT THE END OF THE CHAPTER : This was one of the things I have noticed people saying that the pictures are showing up all together as one at the end of the story. I was confused about this at first but then I realized that this happens if you are using a phone to read the story. I noticed when I used my apple i-phone, all the pictures show up at the end in order but …if you are looking at the website on a laptop computer or desktop PC then the picture scenes show up correctly after each paragraph they belong next to. I have no way of fixing this unfortunately if using a phone or small tablet I think it will bunch all the pictures up at the end of the chapter.
- AUDIO STORY MISTAKES, MIS-PRONOUNCED WORDS: Ok so I am one person working on this website in my free time. I do the pictures when I can, I add the audio and any other edits to the website by myself on top of working, school and other life commitments. I do it all alone, no help. I will admit that I am guilty of just adding the story to the audio with out proofing it first. I don't listen to it before saving it to make sure it all sounds right. I am currently in the process of adding the last few stories on audio and listening to the rest to fix mistakes and badly pronounced words and sentences. I apologize for this and I am working to fix this issue as well.
- Sesshomaru Personality: I had one person note that Sesshomaru's personality is too soft or mushy. Well, I feel like a few things would be different with him. It would be difficult to write his story if he is cold and short with everyone all the time, even the people he suppose to love like his soon to be wife, daughters and son....that would seem strange to me. In my story Sesshomaru has a family and people he loves and has to protect therefore we see a different side of him. I had to show how he and Rin become romantically involved, I have to show how he would be with his daughters....Of course they would be like daddy's little girls and he would treat them like the princesses they are. He would be proud of his son...these things need to show and therefore we would see another side of him....This is his story, he is no longer a side character so we see more now than we did before. I hope that helps explain the reason behind Sesshomaru's personality transformation but I don't think the change is that extreme.
- Demons that don't eat humans.....What's their food? I saw this question I wanted to answer it, I mentioned in side story 3 "Test of Adroitness" That the mother has a forest full of strange demon fruits and Vegetables. Also in Chapter 10 "Zephra" I mention that Zephra likes to eat a broth that only demons eat. We can start with that special demon fruits, Veggies and Broths. I'm sure if we use our imaginations, we can think up all kinds of strange foods that demons enjoy....Or maybe because they are demons....Food is not a necessity, just for enjoyment when they want to
6. INTERESTING CRITIQUE : Below is a critique I got from someone who read this story, I would like to respond to this persons comment/ critique of my story. I do read the surveys and this was one I read
readers comment - Only thing I didn't like about this fanfiction is that the names of the evil demons or enemies are NOT Japanese or Japanese sounding. Would have done some research or asked a Japanese friend with help with naming the foes. Plus, Rin with a slingshot? LOL Give that girl a real weapon like Kohaku's or Sango's if she is going to be a certified demon slayer. Also, have Rin know martial arts or have some kind of spiritual powers like Kagome. Slingshot does not do a whole lot of damage at all. Plus, Rin needs way better character delevopment. She is not a beam of sunshine and rainbows. She should be badass like Sesshomaru and the rest of the Inuyasha gang.
My response - Thank you for this feedback however, I need to clear somethings up. Rin does have a real weapon, her weapon is as good as Kohaku's and Sango's...if you look at the picture of Chapter 4 "Rin the Demon Slayer" there is a picture of it on her back. Also in chapter 1 the very first weapon she was given is the weapon she carries, (given to her by Kohaku as a gift) called a Naginta. If you look this up on the internet there are plenty of pictures of what a Naginta looks like. Also, the sling shot is her second weapon that she uses and they were very effective back in the olden days....David Killed the Giant Goliath with one. You say Rin should be as Bad Ass as Sesshomaru and Inuyasha's gang, well she is as bad as she's going to get because she is not a demon....she is a human, she has no special powers but has been trained by Lady Sango and Kohaku on how to fight, how to slay demons and how to use her weapons; she also has survival skills from being an orphan and a strong passion to protect others nothing more. Lastly, why the evil demons don't have Japanese names? Some of them do...but truthfully, I am an American girl who wrote this fan fiction and I had no desire to have long, complicated names to pronounce and spell in my version of a sequel story. When I got it into my head to create this fan fiction, I already had names picked out and decided to keep them simple. Ryo, Suzaku and a few others do have Japanese names but Zeref's name was completely made from my imagination and I wanted it that way so that it would be unique. I also wanted Nephra, Zephra and Heroshya the children of Sesshomaru to have names that could not be found on the internet or mistaken for some other story. They were unique names I invented special for this story. Hope that clarifies some things. Thank you for your comment and feedback.